BB...

[CoF]

this started out as one of my random poem type thoughts, but i think it could become a good song for someone more musically inclined... and i kinda wanna see what you can do with it. change something, add more, leave it be, whatever. call it a calaboration peice (that i will take full credit for:d: j/k).

blood sweat tears
fight back your fears
it all holds true
when the end comes
for you
live it to the fullest
hold nothing inside
flashes of light
when the bullet hits
your side
glimspes of the future
mistakes from the past
it all seems useless
when the end comes
for you
The time has come
to lay here and die
or pull yourself up
and fight for
your life
the question now left
only you can decide
will it all be pointless
when the end comes
for you....

[wookie]

lyrics are good. needs more, because it sounds like an eminem song from 8 mile. dont get me wrong, ur words are tight.

[CoF]

LOL EMINEM!!! i suppose that's a compliment since he makes millions and i don't so thnx =D and yeah i figured it needed something more, but since Scott doesn't read these forums =P i'ma send it to jubby since he is also quite musically inclined... (YOU DA MAN JUBBY!!!)

[Jubae]

lol naaahhhh. I just like to play, but I will see what I can do....what type of genre should I shoot for?

[CoF]

reoooo0W! i'm thinkin some form of rock heheh nothing too hard... kinda like audioslave type rock... like rock but not hard rock you know what i'm saying... use your judgment based on what ya know about me :-D

[CoF]

oh and since i don't have a cd to burn photoshop on could someone take this and size it to be my avatar

[CoF]

scratch that i just got ps workin

[CoF]

nm someone already hiz00ked me up i see THNX WHOEVER THIS MYSTERY MADMAN WITH THE INSANE RESIZING SKILLZ IS!!!!!

[LA_MERC_i||ega|-op]

You welcome :D

[CoF]

yeah i figured it was either you or mercy... thnx again bro...

[Maximus]

Hey, if you don't mind, I'd like to see what I can do with it too...Myself and a couple friends are forming a band and we've got some great talent!

[CoF]

have at it man... but remember i reserve the right to take all the credit for it =D... (or hell atleast a mention i'd be happy)

[Jubae]

I may be called a total b00n but who is the person in your avatar there biggins?

[LA_MERC_Cowboy_From_Hell]

DAM f000...I totaly missed this thread....sorry. Here is what I'd add/change after the first read through....

blood... sweat... tears!!!!
fight back your fears
it all holds true when the end comes for you

live it to the fullest hold nothing inside
flashes of light when the bullet hits your side


glimspes of the future mistakes from the past
it all seems useless when the end comes TO PASS

The time has come to lay here and die
or pull yourself up and fight for your life

the question now left only you can decide
will it all be pointless when the end BECOMES A LIE....

The changes I made are in CAPS. I can hear it in my head great. Short clean intro with a guitar lead playing behind the clean guitar. The lead comes up as the last note hangs and the distortion builds...the ride cymbal comes up with the guitar ans the lyrics start

blood...sweat...TEARS!!!! (in fact I think that's your title)

Tempo picks up by about 1/3 to say 200bpm. Something in the way of Metallicas Fuel...fast but bouncy....much more bottom end though. Then the lyrics start over at the cadence of the song. Only thing missing is a chorus...not sure what do do there. Could just make it instrumental. Well, that's what I came up with off the top of my head.

Scott

[CoF]

if no one else can i'll do a chorus... and yeah i can hear it in my head also so when i get home i'll scratch out a chorus...

[CoF]

the lady in my avatar is Xtina from the Grim Faeries... =D

[LA_MERC_Cowboy_From_Hell]

Are you hearing what I'm hearing or are we on diffrent tracks??

Scott

[CoF]

nah i'm thinkin we on the same track

[LA_MERC_Cowboy_From_Hell]

w00t

Scott

[LA_MERC_Cowboy_From_Hell]

WHat say ye Jubs...you the other musician here.

Scott

[CoF]

jubs been busy wit does stupid databases... once again "STUPID DATABASES!"

[roXet]

stupid databases!!!

[LA_MERC_Cowboy_From_Hell]

what?!?

Scott

Hey roX, Goldberg is in the WWE.....

[CoF]

its not the wwf anymore? geez i been out of it a while too long i geuss =P

[Rooster]

http://www.wwf.org/

This is why it's not the WWF anymore, just to get ya up to speed.

[CoF]

gheyness

[LA_MERC_Cowboy_From_Hell]

hehehe...I liked WWF better too. WWE is ghEy. The show still rulz though. Can't get enough rasseling (I spelled it that way on purpose). RAW is on tonight...how will the Rock react to Goldberg's spear last week??? We shall see....

Scott

[CoF]

yeah i saw the commercial on tv my bootay gonna be tuning in tonite as well...